ONE:
Angle, horizontal. Looking past DRAKE, to SABRE, to the CANNON CREWS at their guns, to the SMOKE, to the IRON CROWN, as it emerges. That horrible RAMMING SPIKE on the Iron Crown’s nose pointed straight at Pegasus’ amidships.
Perspective here would make IRON CROWN looking closer than it is, I imagine.
NO COPY.
TWO:
On SABRE. The glint in her eyes. There’s a thin line between passion and terror, here. This moment is thrilling, as much as it is terrifying. Everything spinning in her mind. This is the crux – all of her choices brought them to this. She’s either about to be brilliant, or they’re all about to die.
2. SABRE: Fire.
WARNING: Objects off Port Bow are OH MY GOD WE ARE ALL GOING TO DIE
Or Starboard. I’m not actually sure to be honest.
Yes Starboard is the right side…
Got a honest laugh out of me with that one, and that’s not easy to do these days!
That. Does not look good.
…no.
It doesn’t.
LOL Danger Danger something bad will hapen
Not gonna be enough. Looks like she’s going to have to steal the other ship once the boarding fight is over.
What boarding fight? This isn’t the high seas – the ship will drop like a rock.
I quote the German airship Commander two comics ago:
“All hands brace! Prepare to ram! Prepare to board!”
To quote Lady Sabre: “We will spill and sweep at my order!” She also noted that the starboard guns should prepare to fire, so we are looking starboard. What I expect is that she will fire (since the Pegasus is crossing the T, she doesn’t have to worry about return fire), then “spill and sweep”.
My imagination is that this will use the wings to dive suddenly (since The Pegasus is not limited to two dimensions) and once having dropped below the ram, come around and cross the T again at the rear.
This is pure speculation on my part, but I look forward to seeing what actually happens.
Sad moment is there for us in the first part of the image .
” She’s either about to be brilliant, or they’re all about to die.”
They (and I) vote for brilliant.
The problem, of course, is that while we all here imagine her as brilliant, the part where I am brilliant enough to write her being brilliant remains a challenge. Or, to put it another way, I always want Lady S to be smarter than me. So I imagine you can see the difficulty right there 😉
Quite the conundrum, But I am sure you will pull it off. It’s been brilliant so far.
All too clearly. But you’ve been managing this elsewhere for a while now…
It’s like writing Disch’s Camp Concentration
“Perspective here would make IRON CROWN looking closer than it is”
Mission accomplished. Also, this is going to be a long weekend waiting for the next installment.
Is that “Mythbusters'” Jamie Hyneman (second from the right) in the background?
They appear to be taking aim at the port nacelle of the dirigible.That may cause ( if the shot is successful ) it to swing to port, presenting a broadside target.
Congratulations, you have given me yet another excruciating weekend of anticipation .
interesting the second panel. up until now she has the gusto of errol flynn in captain blood = but now, she is frail when captain blood would be pumping adrenlin into his crew with his orders == alright me hardies, follow me. and then his crew would follow him into hell.
I personally like the moment, here – always bearing in mind that comic-storytelling timing is an odd beast, and that each instant revealed in a panel is in context of the other images presented, so when we’re putting up screens twice a week, the pause between these narrative moments can be… substantial. I think the thing I like about this most is what it reveals of her, gives us a glimpse of another facet to her character.
greg … and you know I sympathize with your situation, mayhap what i was looking for was hell fury when she gave FIRE command, then in a third panel, the moment of frailness before the shit hits the fan. that little milli second would feel like an hour. waiting. waiting.
I can’t tell if you’re worried I am somehow offended or not, but if so, I assure you, I am not! She’s who she is, and a lot of who she is has yet to be revealed, only hinted at – at most of that is in ancillary material, frankly. The comparison with Captain Blood is natural, but oddly, perhaps, not an influence I’m working from (though I suspect it is influencing Rick!). My own torments remain the same – trying to be clever enough for her, while knowing I’m not clever enough by half.
One of the interesting things, from a dramatic standpoint, in writing for the web rather than for the page is the way that difficulties in printed comics become magnified. To whit, I write a 20 page comic, it comes out, and those who are so inclined can spend 30 days dissecting each beat, waiting for the next issue. But at least there’re 20 pages for the reader to play with. Here, obviously enough, we’ve got one, two, or rarely three screens, and a consistent pause between each pose, which means the scrutiny is magnified. That’s wonderful, but from a scripting perspective, it’s actually kinda terrifying, because it means any mistake is magnified, as well.
the problem you feel is one i see in the adventure series newspaper strips. how to maintain the readers interest day in day out. use action, keep the word ballons down to 17 words per ballon, link between yesterdays strip in first panel. you have done a good job. i am hooked.
I don’t see frailty. I do see vulnerability, which is a legitimate feeling when a huge meandering husk of iron is about to deliberately smash through your home. But frailty wouldn’t say “fire.” It would say “AAAAAAAAAA” and then maybe flail a bit, wander into the realm of gibbering, and possibly pass out.
methinks you are confusing cowardice with fraility. fraility is weak but stopable. the gusto of captain blood is able to fuse his crew behind with a spirit of indestrucibleness.
I’m confusing nothing with nothing. I’m being flippant.
Actually, I expect to see Drake and Drum glance at each other, say “the hell with this”, produce some surprising pieces of armament, and blow the Iron Crown to smithereens.