DAY 8
SCREEN 1
ONE:
Close, as they walk, DRUM noting that folks seem in a mighty hurry to get off the street.
1. JOHNS: A lot of it’s GOLD, Marshal. You and your tracker, you could spend that most any where…
TWO:
At the door to the Sheriff’s office, DRAKE still with a hand on JOHNS, DRUM hanging back, looking behind.
DRAKE is pushing open the door.
2. JOHNS: …get yourself something fine for your woman. If you have a woman, that is.
3. DRAKE: You ever stop talking?
THREE:
On JOHNS, sheepish.
4. JOHNS: Not so’s you’d notice.
SCREEN 2
ONE:
Angle, the door opened, now.
DRAKE is reacting, drawing, as JOHNS staggers back, having been shot in the chest from inside. JOHNS is surprised.
1. SFX: BOOOOM
My favorite this about this page: either Johns’ cuffs were shot through, or he ripped free due to shock.
My second favorite, the droplets of blood tracing the arc of his flight.
Is it bad that the third might just be the aged paper feel of the gutters?
The tension level just went way up. Johns was a cheater, but we haven’t heard that he was anything worse than that yet (other than a criminal…though cheating could BE his crime). He seems to be a conniving sort, but not a violent offender.
I’m curious as to how much he deserved this, if at all. I await “Part Nine” eagerly!
I guess he’ll stop talking now
Anyone want to take odds that that was some sort of steampunk gun that shot Johns (from within the jail!!).
Why is that fellows hat coming off in the first panel? I really like the light coming from the shot in the last panel. Great art work! And, a real neat twist as I was sure the gunmen were fixin’ to free Johns, not blow him away!
I also really like how the sound effect BOOM follows the trajectory of the shot.
Question: In a scene like this, is the direction “JOHNS is surprised.” necessary? I’m only half-kidding.
It’s a question of style, I suppose – rather than trying to explain to the artist the action or the expression, I always try to relay the emotion. So, well his being surprised might be self-evident, it can’t hurt to say so, right?
Dang starting to like that guy too. Love the pace so far…
I am really enjoying this ride.