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ONE:
Angle, SABRE and HANS facing off. HANS has a very European dueling style, high stance, pointing directly at SABRE. SABRE is much more… well, pirate.
The lovely night sky past them.
NO COPY.
TWO:
Low angle, past SABRE’S legs, as the HATCHWAY she emerged from earlier opens, and the first of the GUARDS begins scrambling out. They’re trying to be silent.
NO COPY.
THREE:
On HANS, still holding his blade as before. Smirking.
1. HANS: My chances ALONE, Lady Sabre?
2. HANS: No, I do NOT.
FOUR:
Past HANS, to SABRE, and then, behind her, the FOUR GUARDS, all of them now drawing their own blades.
3. HANS: With them however…
I love the first panel.
A few pages in and I’m already hooked. I really love seeing the scripts–as someone who isn’t sure how collaborative comics work, these are really instructive and fascinating!
Oh, what a bastard!
His expression on the 3rd panel is AWESOME, btw.
Moustache of dooooooommmm ftw.
Yes, the first panel is one of the best so far; up there with Sabre’s entrance is part three. I love how Hans is all serious and uptight, while Sabre’s all relaxed and has that wonderful smile. This is just so much fun!
I love the look and flow so far. Great start.
All I can say is that you got me hooked, really looking forward to more stories from you.
In the last panel, Lady Sabre looks like Dina Meyer. Not a bad reference, as Ms. Meyer, is, in a word, SMOKIN’!